When Lucas was a child, he never learned to swim. Not being able to swim made him like film making. When he fell in love with pure cinema, he was interested in camera work and editing. After he graduated from bachelor of fine arts in 1967, he tried joining the air force. He was immediately turned down because of his speeding tickets.
Lucas was known best for being creator of space opera in Star Wars and the Indiana Jones character. He was worth about 3 billion dollars in 2010. He is one of American film industry's most successful independent directors. He was also the writer of all four Indiana Jones films.
The first two paragraphs are good. The third...
ReplyDeletedid you mean to say "space" twice?
He did not *get* 3 billion *in* 2010. But maybe he was worth 3billion *by* 2010.
"...most successful independent directors"
fix those, then I'll give you a grade
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Ms. H